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Post by thesameguy on Dec 25, 2015 19:27:01 GMT -5
Maggie RamarosI like the character! It certainly has potential for a nice psychological-thriller type of story. Perhaps some sort of will for revenge could be interesting as well? No one-track minded revenge or anything like that, of course, but well, just a suggestion. You said you weren't spilling all the beans yet, but I'm somewhat confused with getting the powers and how that would've went. Rodney MercayParasites are a fun thing to play with that allow for a lot of interesting things in character development. The addiction part makes it even more interesting, and also the question of who's the parasite could be an interesting twist in the middle of a story. Again confused by the powers though. Trevor SylumI feel like this could've led to paranoia in a very similar way as Maggie did, and perhaps structurally they, for now with this info, feel a bit too similar. The mom being the killer instead of the killed is a fun twist to a classic 'lost his parents' background story though. Winona de ChallonAh, a cause for the powers! Cool! I'd be interested in whether the witch herself has her own agenda which seems like it could be a fun thing to run in the background of the story. Gerald MunezWhile a character type I can enjoy, it feels a bit too close to the clichés... I don't know, no fan of this one. Perhaps the more detailed version is more interesting! Kai WayneI like the idea and it certainly has the potency of being an interesting character, depending on the extent to which he'll undergo doubts and questions his own actions. I think there's something interesting about conscious, intentional compulsive behaviour that the person before, during, and after regrets doing. As for the image you sent around, I'm just going to imagine that's Nachi. Is it? Looks like her (and the yen symbol makes me think so even more). Thanks for the feeback! I never really envisioned Maggie to be a vengeful character. In a way, I want to portray her more as someone who wishes things were back the way they were. She understands why her community hate her and doesn't really fault them. Though testing revenge on her family is an interesting idea. Rodney's powers revolve around absorbing and expelling massive amounts of energy. I can see how Trevor and Maggie feel similar. I planned to make him stand out from the rest with an eagerness to kill. You hit the nail on the head with the witch. I'll try to branch Gerald out a bit more. Originally he was made to be a catalyst for another character. While Gerald believes that government is important and that it can be reformed, the other character believes that government is forever corrupted. I wanted to do something that shows that although the characters have their differences, it's their similarities that bring them together. That their sufferings are drawn by the same thing. I also want to show that how they act with eachother and how they change with each interaction with other characters. Again, thanks for the feedback! Really helps. I hope I can count on your judgement for the next batch. As for the image, yes she's Nachi.
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Post by TheAtom on Dec 28, 2015 13:38:42 GMT -5
Maggie RamarosI like the character! It certainly has potential for a nice psychological-thriller type of story. Perhaps some sort of will for revenge could be interesting as well? No one-track minded revenge or anything like that, of course, but well, just a suggestion. You said you weren't spilling all the beans yet, but I'm somewhat confused with getting the powers and how that would've went. Rodney MercayParasites are a fun thing to play with that allow for a lot of interesting things in character development. The addiction part makes it even more interesting, and also the question of who's the parasite could be an interesting twist in the middle of a story. Again confused by the powers though. Trevor SylumI feel like this could've led to paranoia in a very similar way as Maggie did, and perhaps structurally they, for now with this info, feel a bit too similar. The mom being the killer instead of the killed is a fun twist to a classic 'lost his parents' background story though. Winona de ChallonAh, a cause for the powers! Cool! I'd be interested in whether the witch herself has her own agenda which seems like it could be a fun thing to run in the background of the story. Gerald MunezWhile a character type I can enjoy, it feels a bit too close to the clichés... I don't know, no fan of this one. Perhaps the more detailed version is more interesting! Kai WayneI like the idea and it certainly has the potency of being an interesting character, depending on the extent to which he'll undergo doubts and questions his own actions. I think there's something interesting about conscious, intentional compulsive behaviour that the person before, during, and after regrets doing. As for the image you sent around, I'm just going to imagine that's Nachi. Is it? Looks like her (and the yen symbol makes me think so even more). Thanks for the feeback! I never really envisioned Maggie to be a vengeful character. In a way, I want to portray her more as someone who wishes things were back the way they were. She understands why her community hate her and doesn't really fault them. Though testing revenge on her family is an interesting idea. Rodney's powers revolve around absorbing and expelling massive amounts of energy. I can see how Trevor and Maggie feel similar. I planned to make him stand out from the rest with an eagerness to kill. You hit the nail on the head with the witch. I'll try to branch Gerald out a bit more. Originally he was made to be a catalyst for another character. While Gerald believes that government is important and that it can be reformed, the other character believes that government is forever corrupted. I wanted to do something that shows that although the characters have their differences, it's their similarities that bring them together. That their sufferings are drawn by the same thing. I also want to show that how they act with eachother and how they change with each interaction with other characters. Again, thanks for the feedback! Really helps. I hope I can count on your judgement for the next batch. As for the image, yes she's Nachi. Oh awesome! Nachi is one of the characters I most want to know more about. The Brock-style permanently closed eyes, the similarly permanent smile... there just has to be something beneath that surface and I wanna know what it is! As for the feedback, no problem! Like I said, it's pretty fun. I think indeed vengeful feelings towards the family fit Maggie best. I understand the power itself, I'm just confused as to how they get them. Either it's just a universe in which some people have such powers (like Naruto, Dragonball Z, or even Senran Kagura), or it's a world much like ours in which the person gets the powers some strange way (think Spiderman, but also any mahou shoujo). So if you're going route 2 (which feels like it makes sense), I'm curious how the powers come to be. As for Trevor, depending on where you'd put the focus, indeed, he can either feel very different or very similar to Maggie. A stronger focus on that hatred, that killing intent would probably do the trick. Hmmm... I think Gerald could work well together in a duo. A dialogue partner could help individuate the character as a person rather than an enumeration of clichés, so I am kind of curious as to how you had planned that.
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Post by thesameguy on Dec 29, 2015 2:08:27 GMT -5
I guess now is a good time to explain the second half of the story.
Once the main character gathers all 24 characters, the 24 are gathered under the MC's father, aka the Antagonist. The Antagonist promises the 24 to give them God like powers to take control over their own realities. In return, the 24 will have to do everything in their power to kill his son, the MC. He states that MC is slowly draining his powers and has gathered the 24 to drain their powers as well, hiding the fact that it's actually him who's trying to do drain their powers. While they are all skeptical of this proposal, the idea of being a God is too good for them to pass. The 24 are split into 12 pairs of 2 and distributed to various areas of the wasteland. Meanwhile, MC is tricked by his father into wandering around the wasteland to study weird beings that have began to inhabit there. MC is attacked and learns of his father's offer to the 24. Confused, he sets off to find and reason with the 24 while trying to understand his father's scheme.
Now, regarding enemies. As mentioned above, MC is sent to study weird beings that have inhabited the wasteland, which also appear during MC's quest to find the 24. These beings are the personifications of the emotions, traits, and trauma of the 24 and are named as such (Greif, Depression, Pride, Wrath). As the story progresses, the MC will have a better understanding of them. I may do a better description of them later.
I will also post a list of all the character's abilities and personalities once I'm done listing all of the characters.
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Post by thesameguy on Dec 29, 2015 20:17:00 GMT -5
Second batch of OCs. Feedback would be appreciated.
Toby Malcolm- For most of his life he lived a normal childhood until the government of his country launched missiles against a struggling country. Horrified, he began paying more attention to the global events. With each story of injustice he learned, the less hope for society he had. Eventually, he came to the conclusion that the source of all the problems of the world could be traced back to the misuse of governmental power, either through abuse or neglect of power. Guided by this belief, he grew a distaste for authority, doing only whatever he wanted to do. At some point, he attracted the attention of an anarchist group. Joining their ranks, he was given the ability to alter magnetic fields and was given free reign to do as he pleased. In return, all of his actions would be monitored and recorded for future purpouses. Agreeing, he journeyed across the country, using his Newfoundland power to dish out his own special kind of justice. His idea of justice is constantly changing however, often contradicting itself. While a person of cold logic, he can be very sympathetic to those he sees as "victims of unfortunate circumstances" Though he has a record for being merciful, he is not above using violence for his cause. Represents rebellion.
Jasmine Tajiri- A widower of the man she killed and the mother of the children she lost. Pregnant with her second child, she and her husband argued over aborting the child since they could barely afford raiding another kid. Words led to fists as the fight turned physical, ending with her stabbing her husband with a pair of scissors. Even worse, the struggle led to her baby becoming a miscarriage. Saddened at the lost of both husband and future son, she left her daughter under the care of a friend. Overcome with depression, she became a wanderer, drifting from town to town. Throughout her drifting, she struggles with vetting over her loss. She has contemplated suicide fron time to time. She carries along a large pair of scissors wrapped in cloth as some sort of momento. Represents depression.
Karen Azor- A centaur and a militant general. Long time exposure to war caused her mental state to deteriorate. Due to the lack of knowledge of mental disorders in her city, most came off to believe she went crazy. She was let off of her job and people began to avoid her, growing a reputation as the city's kook. One day she happened to come across a male centaur. Bumping into another, he apologized. This breif contact with another of her kind after so long caused her to have an interest for him. This interest grew into complete obsession, complete with stalking and recording of his activities, even going as far as referring him as her "fiance". One day, he vanished. Panicking, she began searching frantically for him. However, each day she would wake up without full recollection of days past. She could only remember her that her sole mission was to find her "beloved." Represents obsession.
Murphy Willows- An orphan, he was one of many children to partake into an experiment to find a cure for a disease. While a cure was found, all the participants were subjected to body modifications in order to restore their motor functions, leaving multiple scars. As a result of these treatments, he has multiple scars across his face. He dons a mask to hide these marks. While he often spent his time alone, he came to befriend another orphan. This boy had a habit of waiting by the village gate til dark, explaining that his mother told him that he would come back for him before dropping him off at the orphanage. The two friends waited by the gate each day since they met. Weeks passed and he grew bored of waiting. His visits lessened and he would make excuses as to his whereabouts. Eventually he stopped coming. One day, he heard that his friend succumbed to a disease contracted during a storm. Guilty about abandoning his only friend, he continued to wait for his mother for him. Represents guilt.
Eli Gyan- A being made of a black substance. His species are unable to produce their own energy to live, making them dependent on other sources of energy to leech onto, most often sunlight. He is resident of a society with a no tolerance policy. A single minor crime is grounds for banishment and accusation can lead to instant distrust. One day he discovered that his girlfriend was cheating on him and broke up with her. The girlfriend proceeded to worsen his life by accusing him of assaulting her, convincing her firebrand to play along on the night they broke up. Though he was confident in proving his innocent nervousness struck him as the court and media favoured the ex under the belief that she was a "damsel in distress." The gullible public gave massive support to his ex while showing disgust towards him and his friends and family. The courts found him guilty and sentenced him to be banished, his name slandered. Forced to dwell into a cold harsh environment, his anger tempered day by day, hoping to take his vengeance onto those that fined his life. One day he decided came back. Represents injustice.
Leila Fernandez- Her country has an extensive history of constant conflict. Continuing this history, her country had began another war due to a increasing need for natural resources, her village in the crossway. Surrounding nations have sent their armies in an attempt to keep her country under countrol. Panic befell the people causing mass riots. Her village becane target of multiple raids, leaving very few resources for the village to live on. A group of soldiers from a foreign nation was assigned to provide security for the village. Unfortunately, realizing the authority they hold, the soldiers began to take advantage of the people. Having a motherly nature, she tended to those in need along with her sick parents and 5 siblings. She has a habit of putting others begore herself, worsening her physical condition. As military rations began to diminish in size, she began to take up to prostitution in order to get whatever supplies she needed. Although many are aware of her activities and have asked her to cease doing so, she still continues to do so for them. Deep in her mind however, she harbors a wish that things would change. Every night she would look at the stars with the wish in her thoughts. One night her wish was granted, being bathed in a odd ray of light gave her the ability to create stellar explosions. Represents self neglect.
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Post by thesameguy on Dec 31, 2015 19:45:46 GMT -5
i.imgur.com/Dj0keUt.jpgSince Imgur is becoming crap again, I'll have to leave a link to this image of Nachi instead. Not the best pic, but whatever. Happy New Years folks! Expect a ramble in the near future.
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Post by Kumofang on Jan 5, 2016 1:36:19 GMT -5
so you're working on your own story too huh?
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Post by thesameguy on Jan 5, 2016 8:18:50 GMT -5
so you're working on your own story too huh? Yeah. It's a work in progress.
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Post by Kumofang on Jan 5, 2016 9:12:23 GMT -5
so you're working on your own story too huh? Yeah. It's a work in progress. Me too. I'm working on a comic that's about mercenaries with magic powers in a medieval fantasy setting. It's basically The Avengers meets Berserk with a little bit of Jojo thrown in.
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Post by thesameguy on Jan 7, 2016 3:02:42 GMT -5
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Post by TheAtom on Jan 7, 2016 11:20:10 GMT -5
I'm kinda busy with a lot of my school stuff now, so I can't comment on the other characters, but I will later! I like the drawing though, and certainly appreciate the background! I feel like the head is somewhat disproportionate though... Seems perhaps a bit too small? Besides that I think the details on the neck and the collarbone are done quite well. I also think the pose gives off quite a bit of a feeling already what the character may be about. Keep up the good work!
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Post by thesameguy on Jan 7, 2016 16:12:32 GMT -5
I'm kinda busy with a lot of my school stuff now, so I can't comment on the other characters, but I will later! I like the drawing though, and certainly appreciate the background! I feel like the head is somewhat disproportionate though... Seems perhaps a bit too small? Besides that I think the details on the neck and the collarbone are done quite well. I also think the pose gives off quite a bit of a feeling already what the character may be about. Keep up the good work! Thanks! Porportioning has always been a problem with me. I really appreciate you taking the time to comment.
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Post by thesameguy on Jan 9, 2016 5:33:26 GMT -5
I apoligize for the crappy lighting, but that's what happens when you have a crap phone camera and no experience with lighting. Today marks 1 year since I joined the SK community and with that comes a special ramble. Kind of. If there's one thing I hate, it's looking back on my old work. Almost every time I think, "What the hell was I thinking when I was drawing that?" Terrible porportions, off shading, bad lines. So much shame, but it's serves as a reminder to what I need to improve on. Looking at my art overall, I can definitely say I've improved my skills somewhat. I suppose I'll explain just why I came to this forum. Well I first discovered the series while watching random some random videos of YouTube, having come across playthriughs of Shinovi Versus. Further research of the series led me to learn about the first games and eventually New Wave. Now at some point, I came across this discussion here that talked about a message on Mirai's bracelets. I have bad eyes so I tried to open the image so that I could zoom in further.....only to learn hat I had to be a member to access the image. And that's how I got here. Yeah. Continuing, I came across a topic about New Wave team ideas. I came up with the idea of a team based on mythical creatures. This eventually led me to draw them out, thus being the first pieces of art I submitted here. This of course led my to create this art thread. It's been great being here. My first taste of online interaction, befriending others, sharing stuff. Good times. Good times. So as always, meh.
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Post by TheAtom on Jan 9, 2016 7:51:38 GMT -5
No. This ramble is not to be ended with a meh! *content sigh* could've worked, but this is a piece of glorious Senran Kagura-loving history! It should be cherished as such!
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Post by thesameguy on Jan 15, 2016 13:07:16 GMT -5
I just finished my final finals. Being an early graduate, I won't have to go to school til May. HOORAY.........
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Post by TheAtom on Jan 15, 2016 16:04:35 GMT -5
Congratulations! The art is looking good though! Rather than issues with proportions, you seem to have a problem with small heads...
Whoa your school year's entirely different from mine. I'll be graduating this year as well, but next one starts im September (though I have no clue yet what I'll be doing afterwards...)
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